He who seeks answers...

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Name: Miguel del Corazon
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Height: 5'9
Weight: 147 lbs
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color: Black
Ethnicity: Hispanic (Mexican-Filipino)
Appearance: Tall with a muscular body. Always preferred tactical clothing rather than casual ones and when not in combat, always seen wearing a leather jacket or a jumpsuit. Miguel always wore a stoic look on his face, never speaking when not necessary. However, he was not afraid to voice out his opinions when he disagrees with something. Whenever he stares, he always had a bloodthirsty look in his eyes and squints them as if he was peering through a gun.

Other Information:

Personal Theme: Hydrogen

Combat Theme: Vile World / Divide (Ground)

Biography: Miguel del Corazon was a member of the Terran Sentinels even before its dissolution. He was previously an operative specialized in covert operations that involves sabotage, intelligence gathering, assassination and raids in close quarter areas. After its separation from the Directory, Miguel remained as an operative of the Terran Sentinels, operating currently throughout South East Asia. He proved to be an invaluable member of the faction and as gratitude and to further extend his service to them, was granted with a standard Mobile Weapon, Axio Burglar.

He never had any personal objective of his own but he made it his goal to find his long lost family that had been separated to him and while doing so, regain his some of his memories. Aided by mercenary groups and military contractors that "owed him one", he began seeking answers as to what happened to them.

Mobile Weapon: Axio Burglar [Currently]

Affiliation: Terran Sentinels, various mercenary groups

Combat Style: Guerilla
Strengths: Miguel was noted for his quick reaction when both fighting in and out of a Mobile Weapon. He was known for improvisation, using both his surroundings and objects to his advantage when dealing with more than one enemy. His experience in covert operations has made him an ideal man for missions that usually required stealth.
Weaknesses: At often times, Miguel finds himself in a trance of confusion and sadness as he longed for something that he failed to remember. This could have been caused by his amnesia and the separation from his family that he failed to recall in his mind. His ragged breathing were a telltale sign of this.
 
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Appearance: Miguel is tall with a muscular* body. Always (He) preferred(s) tactical clothing rather than casual ones(clothing) and when not in combat,(.) He is always seen wearing a leather jacket or a jumpsuit. Miguel always wore(has) a stoic look on his face,(.) He does not speak never speaking when he feels it is not necessary. However, he was(is) not afraid to voice out his opinions when he disagrees with something. Whenever he stares**, he always had(s) a bloodthirsty look in his eyes and squints them(,) as if he was (is) peering through a gun.

* - How muscular is he? Remember that there are many grades of muscle to fat ratio and various body shapes, each one combines to yield different looks.
**-Is this whenever he stares in any situation? Like at an attractive person? Or a person who said something so dumb his brain is taking it's time to comprehend it? Staring is used for more than anger, be sure to be specific!




Biography: *Miguel del Corazon was a member of the Terran Sentinels even before its (official) dissolution. He was previously an operative specialized in covert operations that involves(d) sabotage, intelligence gathering, assassination and raids in close quarter areas**. After its(TS's) separation from the Directory, Miguel remained as an operative of the Terran Sentinels(an active member), operating currently(currently operating) throughout South East Asia. He proved to be an invaluable member of the faction and as gratitude and to further extend his service to them, was granted with a standard Mobile Weapon, Axio Burglar.***

He never had any personal objective of his own**** but he made it his goal to find his long lost family that had been separated to him and while doing so,(that he had been separated from to) regain his some of his memories. Aided by mercenary groups and military contractors that "owed him one", he began seeking answers as to what happened to them.

*-What was his early life like? What kind of childhood did he have, why did he join TS? What brought him to this point? Why did he chose the fields he did?
**-Could you elaborate what raids in close quarter areas means? I am a dumb and do not know what this means :D
***-Granted the prevelance of mobile weapons in the universe, it would be better worded to not have been granted the unit through "gratitude" and more issued as standard for his team or position. Sometimes to sabatoge ya need to be in a 50 story metalic death machine.
****-This may be a bad way to go about him. Personal objectives make us what we are and who we are. Without motive we as people stagnate and become listless lumps of depression. If he has no personal objectives or motives, then why would he have joined TS in the first place? He's not a robot or a doll, remember. He's a human being! He needs flaws, goals, objectives, personality traits, hopes, dreams, all that good stuff.